SUCCUBUS
tabunan na natin ang naging trip ko sa Baguio. Tama na yan.
Nito kasing umaga, wala naman talaga akong magawa. Ni-retrieve ko na mga past posts ko at nakita ko itong entry (poem-poem-an in the making na sinubukan kong gawing kanta ang pangit naman.)
Ikukuwento ko lang sa inyo ang history niyan.
Alam niyo kasi nung college pa ako, may isang professor na sobrang crush na crush ko. Ang guwapo na kasi, ang talino pa. At mukha pang mabango. Kung iisipin niyo na naging moreno (yung kulay sa balat… hindi si Kuya Germs!) si Dingdong Dantes, siya ang lalabas! Guwapo no? Feeling ko, ako si Marimar! Awwww!!! Whitney Tyson version. heheheheh!!!
hmmm..sa sobrang paghanga ko sa kanya, dalawang taon ko siyang crush. lagi nga akong kinikilig noon kapag nakikita ko siya sa window ng classroom niya.
ito ung nagawa kong tula para sa kanya. wala nga lang din talaga akong guts na iparating ito sa kanya kasi estudyante niya ako… well.. noon pa yun!
title po: SUCCUBUS. (In Western medieval legend, a succubus (plural succubi) or succuba (plural succubae) is a demon, who takes the form of a beautiful woman to seduce men, especially monks [1] in dreams to have sexual intercourse. They draw energy from the men to sustain themselves, often until the point of exhaustion or death of the victim. From mythology and fantasy, Lilith and the Lilin (Jewish) and Lilitu (Sumerian) are in redactive Christian fables (folktales not part of official Christian theology), considered succubi…. via wikipedia.com)
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SUCCUBUS
I:
my words fly with the wind
my whispers fill the air
my song sang by the birds
this way i wish
my voice to reach you
R:
i always long to say
i love you ’til the day comes
that i may live the same way as yours
but for now, i can do nothing but wait
C:
tonight i stare an inch far from your face
watching you sleep
my existence felt frozen
but i won’t let you feel its coldness
i doubt that you would understand
if tonight you’ll see me
it might be the last
so i chose to remain
a ghost who’s unseen, never felt
forever i’m waiting
II:
if i’ve lived long before
i might as well wish not to live anymore
or tonight shall i wish
to take you with me
from your sleep
unawaken.
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hulaan ko, comment ko dito, isa lang o dalawa. English kasi eh. PAg ito umabot man lang ng 20, papa-cheeseburger ako!!! burger! burger! kweng-kweng!
cute mo, pulis.
hahahaha.
nakakatwa ka nman jowk…hehe pa cheese burger ka nman!!
wow..nice poem ha..hope to see some of them someday..mhilig rn aq gwa poems kya lng still not as good as you..keep up the good work..
dapat indi succubus tinaytel mo, “bangungot” or in english, “nightmare in love” or “much ado bout nightmare” hehe loko lang.mas appropriate kasi pag ganun, bangungot na nainlove sa babangungutin, parang ganun, kasi kung succubus puro kalibugan dapat ang words na naisulat kasi wala silang conscience. but to hell, kung papacheese burger ka naman eh kalimutan mo na lang pinagsasabe ko. hahaha. post ka pa ha, enjoy eh. isa ka talagang Zafrang takot mag-english! hehehe
burger….burger..
ehhhhh…..
6th comment… halaka pulis 14 comments to go!
galing ahhh…….
..burger!:D
hehe!!! sali ko sa burger ha! khit dko me getz why so pipol many like you searching and wanted to know such… eeiwww!!!
hirap intindihin nman!!!
mag pa cheeseburger ka nmn burger burger!!!
wayus!hehe..thanx 2 poetic licence!;-)
pang ilan na ba ko sa mga nagcomment? abot na ba sa cheese burger!!! hahaha!!!
ika-14th ata ako..so konti na lang. saang burjer joint ba tayo? o di ba feeling friend din.
pero para mas malaki ang chance ko sa burger, eto po kung inyong mamarapatin..
tungkol sa tula
some thoughts…
i can relate
nandun yung intent
yung angst/want/desire
pero yung words “voice,whisper,song”
ay mga intangibles and can be attributed to your “speaker” being formless/intangible/invisible.but
siguro to make the tension more felt, provide more counter point to her being and her desiring for an embodied-being, would be good to have additional “more solid image” like in stanza C — “an inch far from your face”.
anyways, nothing technical, just how your work came to me. thank you for sharing, made me think din.
sige lang post pa
its nice 2 read ur poem…but its enough coz im sleepy already
uyy,,english!
pacheese burger ka naman miss..hehe!
ganda nung tula.
cheeseburger!!!
yeah!!!! hehe
ok lng yan
burger..ingatz..
hi. do you know why i add you? because i was amazed by your blogs and i like your attitude. lol. =D anyway, we have the same situation. yun nga lang, ‘yung sa’yo ata past na. ‘yung akin present. tas ikaw ndi mo sinabi, ‘yung akin sinabi ko. kaso, ala pa rin nangyari. haha. =] life must go on.. ^^ keep up the good work. stay alive en kickin’ girl..
Natawa ako sa intro. Keep it coming, Ate
hala!! mukhang magpapa-burger ata ako nito.. lagot na!!
More burger coming! Hehehe
HALA! AT NANG MATULUYAN NA ANG CHESSEBURGER MO, DADAGDAG AKO!!
GALING MO TALAGA! KAHIT AYAW MO, FAN MO NA KO MULA NGAYON//
Your poem is nice pero parang nakakalungkot lang isipin na the feeling was not reciprocated.Pa CHEESEBURGER KA NA LANG PARA SUMAYA NAMAN TAYO!O, ano say mo?
pang 26th na ata ako ah…
hahaha.. kaya yan basta ba pa burger ka.. hehehe pero nice poem, hmm succubus huh, another word in my dictionary. hehe
One Greek figure said, “Love is a delicious trouble!” If by that is meant that love is only for the credulous beings, then it follows that the wisest kings were the ones deprived of the sweetest love…Poor King Solomon!Well,just because you are the wisest does not necessarily mean that you’re the sweetest lover.Just as because you’re the wisest does not mean that you’re the most well-versed when it comes to matters of the heart… hehehehe.
pwde..nakoo..pwde p bng humbol s cheeseburger!?eheh..
wish he knew noh..
hi very zad naman story mo bt ok lng u i think nmn ur nce uhm relax lng ok remember mgnda tau jejeje….add mko nmn ako to wmail add ko georgous_grac16@yahoo.com w8 ko ah.ty
igat kp up da gud work
AWTS BURGER NA NMAN
how nice…
magan da po ung kwen2 nyo hehehhe
hmmm.. .
nice…
ayos sali aq
uhm..tama hindi dpat succubus ung title nung poem mo..kc prang wla naman atang namenton don na something about sexual, blah, blah, blah..but anyways it’s still good..
i remember when i was young, about 13,i started to write poems..ung bang mga tungkol sa mga kaweirdohan..nababasa un ng sis ko..tpos meron xang ninakaw don eh,ginamet nyang pang-project nung hiskul xa..wala lang, naalala ko lang..
oi sAma akO jAn.. hahahah
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Hahahaha… astig naman ng iyong blog… hehehehe wala akong magawa and i want to discover about bloging and everything.. and then ng makita ko ang iung pulis pangkalawakan mo na ian… na curious lang ako….
pwedeng humirit sa sa pagcoment! nadala lang ako. nakakatawa kasi. bwaahahaha…
ciguro gutom lang ako at gustong kong humabol sa libreng burger.
antay ako!
hi.. he he ala aqong maicp n mai comment zeo xorry.. ingatzz nlang…!!
hehe,,, sali san bqa ang paburger?? sama naman me.. hehe
ask q lng,pno gmawa nh blog,? ynx poh,
burger..!? ang kuleet
add kita… pra makabalik p ko dito sa blog mo…
^^,
pra sureness n din n updated ako… kung magpapaburger k..
message ko n lng syo ung home address ko… hehehe
lampas 20 na to oh..
cheeseburger namin?
burger burger! hehe! burger namen!? ^^
naku pulis panu yan more than 20 na,cheese cheese cheese burger, ay lau ko d2 me dubai eh pag uwi kunalng ha..
reserve 4me!!!!!!!
abot pa ba ko sa cheeseburger?
pa-cheese burger ka!
wala na…wala nang burger!!!meron pa ba pulis?
double thumbs up again…pinapangiti mo ako…madaling araw pa nman..hehe…galing!sana may tym pa uli ako magbasa…i lyk it…fan ka ng sis ko…witty ka..salute!
is taht sir owen? the guy ur talkin about in this blog?ahahaha..
kmusta nmn akoh..mnsan n nga lng dumaan ngbubuking p..wide guess lng nmn..peace out glai..haha
dpt tinaasa moh ung bilang ng mga comments..ayn dmi moh utang nah oh..hehe
ang gnda ng poem mo..haha nkk relate kz aq ng bonggang bongga! hihi